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Brown - Simply spell binding. Great article, and yes - your paintings, just incredible.

Jester, it's a very thought provoking read. I like the pacing.

Mamta - Very Happy Birthday!!

happy birthday Mr. Chicken! Smile

again - very pure and the pace - not a heart beat wasted.

I know it's you call - Are you going to post this in finished?

Now we’re getting somewhere – what can you do to make it “more poetic”?

The pace and energy seem pretty good – maybe just a little trimming to tighten up the focus?

your touch never stops amazing. I'm rereading this one again just make sure I see more of what you placed here.

very deft snap shot of this event.

much sharper now - really hits very hard.

OK - Very Light Rewrite

Erskine Hawkins babumps sugar-pain gentle,
flesh long-gone to Alabama’s’ rich dirt and rain,
saxophone raisin its sweet angel cane.

Scatter, bored hyenas, from chro ...

yes, must comment on how well this write flows - great work my friend.

What are your plans for this one? I liked the zigs and zags so to speak.

very high on the emotional scale and see the message very clear.

ok - the intensity and purity of what you've captured - sublime.
You’re in past tense/passive voice most of the time – Is this intentional?
A possible suggestion - Making it more present tense ...

yes this is a much strong write - really like it

please do - very nice read

great energy and imagery

agree, very nice indeed!

Erskine Hawkins lilts sugar-cane pain gentle,
flesh long-gone to Alabama’s’ rich dirt and rain,
saxophone crying to the sweet angels.

Scatter, bored hyenas, from lumbering,
18 wheeled masto ...

very cool - Thanks for the concrete suggestions! I plan on adding a little more to the start of this piece and will look at the line issues.

Hey, Butterflyzrfree, thanks for your great comments! - You're right there is no real setup in this piece. It's a snap shot from the drivers' perspective and what they're seeing in this too small a ti ...

They scatter, bored hyenas, from lumbering,
18 wheeled mastodon diving for Exit 89.
Regroup as though nothing happened.

And we roll, 10 over down highway 85.
Sunlight glitter-pops off red-silve ...

Ok - Very cool on the performance!