She fell into my arms under the bright evening sky
I felt like this feeling would never die
a Timeless moment inseperable like this
a Captured moment with this kiss

a Breeze from an angels wings,
captures me in this moment of silence and breath
Nothing else matters in life and in death

Your soft whisper and unspoken love
This can only be from above

God unlocked the solitary chaimber of my heart,
Given to you which will never keep us apart

From the poetry section, read the original here: Original Poem

Hi, BH. Unfortunately, you have included in this poem a great many cliches, which is fairly common when poems are written about love. "Love" rhyming with "from above" has been used thousands of times through the years, as have many other of your phrases. My suggestion would be to read other poems in the "Love Poem" section and find a few you really like, then study what you like about them so you can learn what works.

Thank you for the advise