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Evanvan
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PostPosted: Fri May 28 18:31:16 EDT 2010    Post subject: bird and branch Reply with quote

My first try at poetry ever, basically. Be harsh, I need a lot of help! Thanks for reading.




Build me up.
Take these twigs
these crinkle-leaves left from autumn
now soggy with mold and new sweat
carry them up to the nearest birch
plaster them together.
I can be a modular home for nature's nomads
broken families will use me
I will carry their eggs to term
and when the colors turn
I will hold the bark like I hold you
egg and arm the same
until too many pieces have fallen off
and I am beyond recognition.
Leave me through winter.
We will rinse and repeat come spring.

You have built me up
with shaky twigs
leaves caught in dry corners
that never tasted the melting snow.
you carried them up to the highest branch
somehow your salt and snot keep them together
I want this summer to last forever
this nest to never fall apart
you to return
with wind on wing
with me in mind
But that's up to the bird.

This bird sings of the South
of the West
of never coming back
Winter will wait until she is ready:
the pieces will start to fall off.
I will hold on to empty bark
and crash down from higher than ever.
Next year, those twigs will be weaker
those leaves like jigsaw pieces
500
1000
4-million-piece puzzles
each time taking longer to put back together
each time a new picture.
until once
days or years from now
they will be dirt
and I will return to the worms.

So build me up.
Make me better
than crinkle-leaves and treenails
give me something important to hold
use me
make me strong
fly and let me fall.
Because let's face it
birds are birds
if I had the sky
I'd be bored by twigs too.
And so I give up
but I can't give up
build me up.
I want it more than ever.
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Evanvan
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PostPosted: Fri May 28 18:32:20 EDT 2010    Post subject: Re: bird and branch Reply with quote

Oi! I had formatting (indentations) with it but that didn't go through. Oh well.
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wylde
Starved and screamed and ate mad dogs


Starved and screamed and ate mad dogs
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 1 5:11:40 EDT 2010    Post subject: Re: bird and branch Reply with quote

hang in there dude - i enjoyed some of the more lyrical areas...for me the more 'conversational' parts didnt stike a chord on my strings. def some good stuff to work with though. Cool

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