gold
flecks dance
on
sun drenched
skin, sinful
eyes flash
with
lust as
I melt your
flesh with my kiss
cool white sands
below
us
jealous
of the heat
we have
swiped
from the
sky

jeeezzzz another one, stttttttttttttttttop, no more waltz wave. this one is really icky.

yeah, some nice images, keep penning.

lol but i love writing these, its fun to see the waves form...am preparing for my beach trip next weekend!

wait a minute...ICKY!!! mean....

wordsmithwannabe wrote:

lol but i love writing these, its fun to see the waves form...am preparing for my beach trip next weekend! wait a minute...ICKY!!! mean....

so there will be a few more after your beach trip - please write on seashells and starfish and crabs. lol

i like this form too. i will PM you another one to read by marianne moore

coolio

I was just toying with your wonderful
poem into 3 verses. One piece vs three
piece bikinis, flows better as one, Its
amazing how one can change a poem so much
by splitting into verses. Was it ever written in 3
sections. Hope you don't mind me
toying around. (I'm about to post one here, please
throw it around, needs a good slashing.)


gold 
flecks dance
on
sun drenched
skin

sinful
eyes flash
with
lust as
I melt your
flesh with my kiss

cool white sands
below
us
jealous
of the heat
we have
swiped
from the
sky

no i don't mind you toying with it at all! we're here to share and learn. i hadn't realized that it could be split into thirds, didn't write it that way but now i see your point. since it's a waltz wave, it's meant to stay continuous to show the wavelengths in the typeset, so i'll leave it as is, but thank you for taking the time to look at it in depth, that's really cool

Nice images from the words, and of course, the waves.This is such a cool form to work with, I tried one of my own when I read yours. Thanks for sharing! ~A.D.

i'm so glad you liked this! and i look forward to reading your take on this cool form