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 Posted: Fri Aug 19 4:12:24 EDT 2011 Post subject: the razors of my fears |
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i slide along
the razors of my fears
too sore to bleed
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| Posted: Fri Aug 19 12:32:27 EDT 2011 Post subject: Re: the razors of my fears |
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I like this. The form is like haiku, but the subject matter is not. It says just enough.
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| Posted: Fri Aug 19 18:16:57 EDT 2011 Post subject: Re: the razors of my fears |
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Makes me shiver! The Razor's edge? Scary! Stay sharp! Warm Wishes, Tasha
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wylde
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| Posted: Mon Aug 22 2:16:45 EDT 2011 Post subject: Re: the razors of my fears |
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| fogglethorpe wrote: |
| I like this. The form is like haiku, but the subject matter is not. It says just enough. |
hugh - thanks. and myself, i fully acknowldedge that all the technical elements for writing a true haiku are beyond me or my style.
it matters, that this spoke, just enough.
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| Posted: Thu Aug 25 22:02:06 EDT 2011 Post subject: Re: the razors of my fears |
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Interesting, my my. Well I still say, "Brrrr." Warm Wishes, Tasha
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