Trick of the light

lukaki26

Love

True recognition and acceptance
reciprocated in the eyes of another.
Sharing one divine moment
that sees beyond our mortal lives,
to something infinitely more lucid.

Or

A trick of the light.
Perhaps we have become
so adept at deception,
we convince ourselves
this is real.

abdo11

good poem

lukaki26

Thanks

romeo_blackhearted

interesting poem, love does play tricks on you....but i think it isn't love always that plays the trick, sometimes it's ourselves.

LoSt

I like the perspective this poem offers

FuchsiaFestival!

The voice of the poem shows great character.

Ozymandias

I find the first stanza full of overworked cliches - maybe this is deliberate so that you can contrast it with the second stanza, which is much better. Such a contrast would be a good idea, but I think it could be a bit more subtle.

lukaki26

Subtlety has never been my strong point Ozy. You are right the first stanza is undermining the first which is a parody and deliberately cliched. Maybe I should reconsider how I approach this, and see if I can be more light fingered.

Ozymandias

lukaki26 wrote:

Subtlety has never been my strong point Ozy. You are right the first stanza is undermining the first which is a parody and deliberately cliched. Maybe I should reconsider how I approach this, and see if I can be more light fingered.

Yeah, I thought you were too good a poet to write S1 seriously. But one has to be careful not to overdo parody.

electrictiger

Ah, love; I have given up trying to understand it. I think of it as your poem put is, with an 'inclusive' or joining the stanzas - what you said first, and also equally what you said next. A trick, an acceptance of the trick. But love all the same.