Mist

hotstuff

Broken
Spirit, soul, hopes
Bruises topped with bruises.
Fresh blood covers scabs
It looks at me
He doesn’t mean it
Throat closes again
Can’t breathe
Anger
Spittle
Feeling warmer
Release
Gasp
Dizzy, alive
It walks away
He returns
Eyes swollen, red
Stop crying
Your not there anymore
Don’t go back now
WAKE UP!

Winter

Holy f-ing shit.

Yeah, I understand that. I know that.

redheadedslxt

intense! i liked this a LOT.

Abhorant

Very uncomfortable. I don't know that the term "like" can be applied to this. I would say well done. Very strong stuff.

hotstuff

Thanks all

arpeggio

It IS a strong subject...but! The sentence fragments make it read a bit choppy in my hunchbacked and foot dragging opinion. maybe a few articles?

hotstuff

Thanks Arpeggio. I know what you are referring to. I thought perhaps I could make it be like a dream...images here and there...not being able to remember them all so smoothly... I can understand however that it would be difficult to read.

arpeggio

I hope that fellow staring at me with one scary and sinister eye in your cropped pic isn't involved!

I was just thinking of all the pics with half of a couple excised from them I've seen over the years.

I wonder there's a pic of one of my ex gf's on a bulletin board somewhere with my disconnected hand still around her waist and a ragged tear where the rest of me was... Smile

hotstuff

LMAO no..he's just a friend Smile

But you are right..he looks pretty scary with just one eye LOL

Abhorant

I was tempted to say something similar the first time I read this, but as you said you werent there anymore, I didn't want to be offensive... but yeah... I had the EXACT same thought... lol

hotstuff

LOL there isn't too darn much that could offend me Smile