Alcohol flows down the back of my throat,
in endless gulps of warmth and satisfaction.
Gag.
Gulp.
Gag.
The flow of strength is only a gateway into the need for more strength.
Coke numbs my nose and induces stronger feelings of invincibility.
Gag.
Snort.
Gulp.
Gag.
Snort.
The nicotine of my menthol cigarette opens my sinuses.
Drip insues.
Gag.
Snort.
Puff.
Gag.
Snort.
Music drowns the sound of my sorrow.
The car swerves into on coming traffic.
I swerve to protect myself.
Sober.
Briefly.
I pull over.

Back to work.

wow, scary as hell... gotta think about this one - no personal experience to fall back on... but a great topic - there are nuts like this on the roads and they are a real danger... do people actually snort while driving?

Alcohol flows down back of my throat,
endless gulps of warm satisfaction.

Gag.
Gulp.
Gag.

Flow of strength--a gateway to the need for more strength.

Coke numbs my nose, inducing stronger feelings of invincibility.

Gag.
Snort.
Gulp.
Gag.
Snort.

The nicotine of menthol cigarette opens sinuses.

Drip insues.
Gag.
Snort.
Puff.
Gag.
Snort.

Music drowns the sound of sorrow.
Car swerves into oncoming traffic.
I jerk the wheel
to protect myself?

Sober.
Briefly.
I pull over.

Snareaho--I like the imagery in this poem and the way longer lines are interspersed with shorter ones. The main thing I worked on was making your poem more fluid, more active, and limiting unnecessary words. I debated about the last line ("Back to work") and kind of like the piece without it. This way, the reader is left with images of the narrator sober, but we know it's brief. The narrator will soon get over the scare and be back to driving and drugging!

I think the second-to- last stanza needs a bit more work. I took out the second "swerved" because of unnecessary repetitiveness. I added the question mark to the last line because I think it reveals the irony of the narrator's instinct to protect, even while he/she is being self-destructive. It's almost as if the narrator realizes the dichotomy there. I'm still not quite happy with its flow.

Keep working on it--I like the pov.