mistress and wife

Deleted_User_6308

Poetry's my mistress,
to Music am I wed;
the former breaks my mattress,
the latter makes my bed

Jackson

I'mno good at critiques but this was wonderful, so simple yet full of your life in a way. and it made for one hell of a nice grin.

Deleted_User_6308

thanks Jackson-- been meaning to extend this............

Deleted_User_6308

While Poetry's my mistress,
to Music am I wed;
the former breaks my mattress,
the latter makes my bed-

but whether at a fortress
or in a weathered shed;
I know I can't afford this,
then go along instead.

iwrite

I liked it better before th extention; very sweet and kinda sexy.

eamonnlorigan

DON'T EXTEND IT!!!!!!!!!! It's a perfect little observation, full of meaning and ambiguities and brings that smile that someone posted about to anyone who's ever lived with music or poetry or both.

"They say there was a secret chord thst David played and it pleased the lord." Don't mess with perfection.

electrictiger

I adore the first. tiny nitpick, and mostly personal taste:
the "am I" inversion grates at me.

Deleted_User_6308

thanks guys!!