dreamers dillema

LoSt

I never dreamt such a dream
As the dream I dreamt of you
But the problem with dreamers who dream these things
Is will those dreams come true?

Ozymandias

Nice little piece of whimsy. But I got pulled up with a jerk at "I do dreamt"! May I suggest "I was dreaming" instead?

I'd change L3 to "But the problem for dreamers, when dreaming such dreams," - it adds another "dream" and chimes with "such" in L1.

To keep a consistent pronunciation I might change "dreamt" to "dreamed" in L1.

haymanali

Good dream.