and you keep reading their posts about nothing...

lol well if you want to help a girl out you could give me some feed back on this freaking poem that everyone seems to be reading but no one has the balls to say anything...silence is poison.. would rather have an f-you, you suck then silence.

Which one?

this










Slide down spine
sticky sweet bitter
How did you learn to fly-
by owls in the dead of night?
No, not you, you're to clever for that
shhhhh

the slip of thighs Caught off Guard
when watchers laid tucked under waves
like a bass mouth
open wide
sucking the world within its breath

you picked your time well
and here I drown below acres of undertows
drinking stings that swirl beneath a conch
drinking shame from a sea's hell

Kiss me in the sunrise and throw me back to the Jellies

this pain can't live forever
tomorrow I will breathe

tomorrow I will


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the bottom doesn't work out right but its fine in the finished section..

Jellyfish in the finished section

its gotten a bunch of reads but no one has commented.. I think its because either people don't want to hurt my feelings or they are not sure what to make of it.. honestly I just want honest feed back...nothing is more frustrating when you are trying out something new and get silence..not sure to scrap it, start fresh or leave it. Or if I even need to take this idea a step further.

Thanks btw. Even tho I posted it in the finish..totally willing to do some editing its just the only spot where the two.. i.e the image and the poem coding will work together. Its kind of an important poem for me... so I want it to be done right, which is why I took it to this new level of a picture being made up of a poem..and there are reasons why I did it the way I did..but again if its not working I really want to know so I can fix it.

alright I stay up all night and decided to take it to the level that I really wanted to take this.. so here it is...would love to get some feed back.

ignore this message.. had a glitch but figured it out.

Lyla, I commented on your poem in PAP.

Thanks again fogglethorpe I really like the video much better tho.. however would love to see what you think of that. Also editing video is a million times easier then editing a picture. So if totally if anything hits you weird let me. thanks again.

3ring wrote:

and you keep reading their posts about nothing...

you are hilarious!