OPEN your eyes and see
See how bitter, life can be
The conversations, that rules the nations
Turns into situations
In which lies and fantasize begins to arise

From the top of the moutain
To the depth of the sea
His love will never be
Trusting in your heart, can get you caught
In the mist of crazy thoughts
Love flows from HIGH to low, to right out the back door
I gasp for air, but there is no one who cares
Who can supply air

Hoping and praying, but they keep on taking
Taking life from children, that are innocent and sweet
And there is no one to defeat
The enemy and his army fleet

Need help on title, any suggests.

Is there another way to start beside "Open Your Heart"? I did that in a piece once and a well known slam performer told me to get rid of it. I don't recall who wrote the piece, but I read a poem about a poet who was reading his piece to Charles Bukowski. Afterwards, Bukowski told him it sucked because he used the word "star," which he felt was old, tired, and cliched.

Let's start there. I'm having a hard time getting into the rest of it because I can't get past the first line.

Of course, you can always tell me to f*** off and leave it as is.

Sal Treppiedi
Albuquerque, NM

OPEN your eyes and see
See how bitter, life can be
The conversations, that rule the nations
Turns into situations
In which lies and fantasy begin to arise

I made a couple of slight alterations, as I found this part hard to read.

I personaly don't mind the opening.

I have seen it many times before, but, so what.
I that's the way you want to put it fair enough!

Thanks for the advise, this poem was written 3 years ago and I'm still playing with it.