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I sit by the pond created by the streams of my tears and dream,
 dream of a tomorrow that won’t ever be
A tomorrow where you would still be;
 Whole
A tomorrow where I could feel you and hear you

But regardless of how I try to create the
reality
 The truth always emerges and brings it
 crashing down
The dreams of techno-color get cast to greyscale
 Every pixel of my dream distorts, falls, and shatters on the ground

Acceptance is the only way now
 But shying away is so much easier
So for now I’ll enjoy the moments of my
 Falsified reality and sit with you again

Until the window is cracked and the outside comes flooding in
 I’ll never not choose a reality that has you
Just wait for me to cast a dreamscape again.
 We will be returned to a reality with us

About this poem

I lost my father recently and during a major grief stricken moment I just reached for my phone and started typing then there was this. I would do anything to be able to see him again. It’s very hard to accept and I want my life back with him in it.

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Submitted by guyalbert on January 02, 2025

Modified by guyalbert on January 02, 2025

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15 Comments
  • Byfaithjaynak
    I am sorry for your loss; this is a beautifully written piece of art!
    LikeReply 14 days ago
  • officialsamoleejnr
    Wow, the lines could show you really missed someone.
    LikeReply 27 days ago
  • bookerina
    Lovely poem about grief. My condolences about your father.
    LikeReply 312 days ago
  • Heyjude
    Well done
    LikeReply 318 days ago
  • RVN
    superb
    LikeReply 318 days ago
  • Akinpet23
    Revisioned by love.
    LikeReply 318 days ago
  • StylesRobin
    Longs for a world without for lack in between the lines here, where this pain can live and grow into every way it can. I hope instead for what you seek, we only can.
    LikeReply 321 days ago
  • TanjaKlaric
    Beautifully articulated
    LikeReply 327 days ago
  • Akinpet23
    Well penned
    LikeReply 327 days ago
  • Shazzajones112
    Lovely poem.
    LikeReply 327 days ago
  • sharona.reeves81
    somber loss - heartfelt words - beautifully penned!
    LikeReply 227 days ago
  • BellaTheMilkCarton
    nice
    LikeReply 21 month ago
  • ladyygracious
    Nice
    LikeReply 11 month ago
  • AIDA
    What a beautifully poignant poem! Your exploration of loss and longing is deeply moving, capturing the delicate balance between hope and acceptance. The imagery of the pond created by your tears is striking, evoking a sense of vulnerability that many can relate to. I love how you convey the struggle between the desire for a "techno-color" tomorrow and the harsh truth of reality—it's a powerful metaphor that resonates profoundly.

    Your choice of words flows effortlessly, drawing readers into your emotional landscape. The transitions between dreams and acceptance are skillfully woven, creating a sense of longing that lingers long after the last line. The final lines offer a glimmer of hope, reminding us that even amidst heartache, the act of dreaming and the bond we share with loved ones can create a reality worth waiting for.

    Overall, your poem is a masterful blend of emotion, imagery, and introspection. Thank you for sharing such a heartfelt piece of art; it truly resonates! Keep writing—your voice has the power to touch hearts!
     
    LikeReply2 months ago
  • AIDA
    What a beautifully evocative poem you’ve crafted! Your imagery—particularly the metaphor of the pond created by streams of tears—is powerful and haunting. It immediately draws the reader into a deeply emotional space, and your reflections on longing and acceptance resonate with so many. I can feel the weight of nostalgia and the bittersweet nature of memory in each line.

    Your use of enjambment effectively conveys the flow of thoughts as they cascade like water, pulling us along with them. The contrast between the desire for a perfect tomorrow and the acceptance of truth is a poignant theme, and you handle it with sensitivity and depth.

    Here are a few suggestions for improvement to consider:

    1. Clarity and Flow:
    While your imagery is striking, some lines may benefit from slightly more clarity to strengthen the emotional impact. For instance, you could expand on how the “truth” emerges—what specifically brings it crashing down? Adding a more vivid detail here could create a more intense moment of realization for the reader.

    2. Pacing:
    Consider the pacing of your poem. Some sections feel a bit slower due to longer lines, while others have a quicker rhythm. You might play with line lengths to enhance the emotional cadence—shortening a few lines could create a sense of urgency or sharpness that matches the feeling of sudden realizations.

    3. Enhanced Conclusion:
    The final lines are heartfelt and strong, but you might want to explore closing with an image or metaphor that ties back to your opening. This could create a fuller sense of circularity in the poem, leaving readers with a lingering thought or image to reflect on.

    Overall, this is a touching piece that beautifully expresses a universal struggle with loss and longing. I can tell you have a strong emotional connection to your work, and with a few tweaks, this poem has the potential to shine even brighter! Keep writing and sharing your voice—it’s a gift to behold.
     
    LikeReply2 months ago

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