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'Smack - Bang' to the point in every sense, with a question no one can ever answer. This poem has a great melody.

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Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Thursday, May 26, 2011 (12:31:01)

Thanks. I'm glad you mentioned melody..it is mostly anapest meter, and meant to be set to music. And I did leave it open ended by design. Hoping you and yours are well..-H


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anapest meter, gosh I learn something new from you every one in a while.

Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Wednesday, June 01, 2011 (08:52:11)

The anapest meter is very musical..it's perfect for lyrics.


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Wow this is good!

What's good

The message
The lyrics
the piece as a whole

The peace as a whole

(my mind did that)

Have a good weekend
Ilan

Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Wednesday, June 01, 2011 (08:52:44)

Thanks Ilan. Glad you liked.


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We go forward, to the best of our ability.Trying not to look back at the remanants of a crippled life, but forward to were we walk with a pride of acheivement. Of leaving the hate and violence behind. Thanks for sharing, dAVE

Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Wednesday, June 01, 2011 (08:53:42)

Dave..thanks for reading. I wanted to write an atypical protest song, looking at peace as more of an anachronism.


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Beautiful poem and heart felt. Reading it all the way through it keeps carrying me back to the second stanza...

They fight over sand
It’s more than a brand

These two lines should tell us what to do. They fight over sand because it is their sand and it has been branded with their ancestors blood and enemies. To let go would disrespect their ancestors and also their enemies.

We no the answer to the question on what to do.

Let them have their sand... BWP... James... Hopes for peace...

Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Thursday, June 02, 2011 (10:32:10)

Hi James..thanks for sharing your insight.

The poem does not take a position on the conflict you mentioned, or any other one. But it is meant to provoke thought by asking a question, by saying, "Ok, we have failed miserably up to now. What's next?" The commercialization and even the dumbing down of the word "peace" doesn't help..I tried to cover most of the popular ways this has been done.


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Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by BrokenWordsPoet on Thursday, June 02, 2011 (12:22:03)

I love your work because it does make the reader think. I guess that makes you a thinking poet... In hopes for peace... BWP... James...


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I just love your poetry, and this one is filled with such emotion and satire. It is my belief poets feel the injustice of it all more than any other group of people.

Great writing.

Best,

Tamara

Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Sunday, June 05, 2011 (10:43:31)

Hi Tamara..and thank you for that. I think poets expose things, big and small.


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Peace is a metaphysical notion that must reside within us in order to be divided amongst the interpreters--and the ones who know what peace is when it comes to unity. You displayed an excellent message here.

Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Sunday, June 05, 2011 (10:46:17)

Hi Sammi..thanks for the input. Perhaps we need to start with a definition.


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where do we go from here indeed hugh?
i,ve seen a few messes in my life.......but fightring over sand and oil........tut...tut...tut..naughty N.A.T.O. - love and peace -paul.

Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Sunday, June 05, 2011 (10:47:58)

Hi Paul..and peace to you and yours.


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This is my favorite poem that I have read of yours. A serious subject contrasted by the limerick like ryhtym of the poem , makes it all the more powerful.Great write, great read,

Re: Peace (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Monday, June 13, 2011 (11:11:24)

I am glad you like it, and I definitely appreciate your great comment.


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