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Poems - My Prayer for You

My Prayer for You

by Odie

Before I close my eyes to sleep
And dreams into my head creep
I’ll say a prayer for you
And hope my blessings come true
That sweet dreams on your pillow fall
That faith will keep you standing tall
That happiness will surround you
That no day will find you blue
That love will find your heart
That it will fill your every part
That someday you will find someone
That you will say, “My search is done”
That you will say, “I am complete
That my heart someone like you did meet!”

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They say that a good (Score: 1 )
by jing on Saturday, June 30, 2007 (05:58:27)

They say that a good poem should be able to transport the reader to the setting of the poem. While reading your poem, I was actually imagining someone sleepy with face serene in prayer. Write more.

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this poem has no rea (Score: 1 )
by serenityjs on Friday, February 22, 2008 (15:33:38)

this poem has no real rhym or meter...it has the potential to be a very well read verse but needs some revision

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Oh, Odie, that's exa (Score: 1 )
by WilliamMadoc on Saturday, March 29, 2008 (19:38:46)

Oh, Odie, that's exactly how my wife feels about our son.

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Very nice Odie. I'd (Score: 1 )
by Danny-R on Tuesday, May 05, 2009 (04:46:34)

Very nice Odie. I'd be tempted to just tweak that last line.Maybe:
"That one like you, my heart could meet."
This is in keeping with the predominant 8 count through most of the poem, and also gives an air of expectancy and hope.
Danny

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