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Poems - Yeah Mom! I'm Cleaning My Room!
| | Yeah Mom! I'm Cleaning My Room!by varivas
I’m too big for all this junk
that fills my overcrowded room.
I think I’ll give it all away,
have lots more space where I can chill.
Hop on Pop! Too old for that.
I’d jump on dad when he would read it.
We’d laugh and laugh, roll on the floor.
I’d better keep it… for dad of course.
These books too, my very favorite
bedtime stories. I used to need them
every single night. Not now.
But I like to see them on the shelf.
Viewmaster. Baby stuff. But this one’s cool.
Dinosaurs. And this one’s from our trip
to Washington. Maybe I should
keep it one more year. Or two.
What’s in this crate? Lego Dragons!
This wing goes here, and this leg there.
I can get them back together.
I’ll only take a minute. Yeah mom,
I’m cleaning my room. Here’s what you
can give away: two paperclips,
Spiderman with a broken arm,
and this old red and black stuffed monkey.
Wait! I forgot. I won that monkey
at Six Flags. Maybe I could
fix that arm on Spiderman.
Two paper clips would work just fine.
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oh wow, this is so c
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by phishy on Monday, November 17, 2008 (11:03:35) |
oh wow, this is so cool. so dramatic and clear. i can see the memories floting and the decisions being taken
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Re: oh wow, this is so c
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:14:04) |
Thanks! I really love writing kid poems. I need to start up again. I haven't been writing much at all lately. Time to get back into it.
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Nice write, You shou
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by Melly on Tuesday, November 18, 2008 (00:05:27) |
Nice write, You should see my basement... Full of those memories.. I think I should clean it out.. Or maybe not till next year or two.. lol very well written, I enjoyed the read.. Melly
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Re: Nice write, You shou
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:15:02) |
Thanks! And yeah, I have a basement like that too. My husband thinks I am a pack rat. I am not I just save things I might need or want someday. <-;
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lol... i liked this.
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by jahnvi on Thursday, November 20, 2008 (04:14:35) |
lol... i liked this. it is so true.
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Re: lol... i liked this.
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:15:46) |
Thanks! And as far as I'm concerned, saying that "it is so true" is the highest compliment I can get for a kid poem!
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lol!! good one! gee,
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by Zbird on Wednesday, December 03, 2008 (15:45:35) |
lol!! good one! gee, that wouldn't be Billy you're writing about there would it? 
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Re: lol!! good one! gee,
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:16:59) |
Thanks. It was kind of based on Billy, but my kid poems, unlike my "adult" poems, aren't always mostly fact based, but more "atmosphere based". I really do need to write some more. I want to get a book of kid poems together.
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Great humorous poem
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by butterflyzrfree on Monday, January 26, 2009 (23:07:47) |
Great humorous poem about the inablilty to let go of the past. Nice write!
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Re: Great humorous poem
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:17:33) |
Thanks for the comment, and yeah, even kids don't like letting go of the past.
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Excellent! I could
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by Jayelle on Sunday, March 22, 2009 (20:58:57) |
Excellent! I could appreciate this one thoroughly, being a "saver"/"packrat"! So hard to let go of things that brought us such pleasure and good memories. I say I'm saving all those wonderful toys "for my grandchildren" (I hope to have some day!), but I especially enjoy the childrens books, and could read and reread them! Nice job on this piece!
"Jayelle"
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Re: Excellent! I could
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:19:09) |
Thanks for the comments. Yep, I save things too, the basement is full of stuff I'll use some day. Really, I will.
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I loved your descrip
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by easyeverett on Sunday, April 12, 2009 (00:15:06) |
I loved your descriptive rembrance and comfort from memories triggered by childhood "things." How integrated the physical nuances of experience are with the emtions of growing up. Very good write V. tom
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Re: I loved your descrip
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:20:21) |
Thanks! It's been a long time! I've not been writing lately, so have been avoiding the site. I'm trying to make a come back. Reading all the comments really is inspiring me to write again.
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hahahahahahaha, ur w
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by Martha on Monday, April 27, 2009 (09:16:51) |
hahahahahahaha, ur writing is brilliant !
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Re: hahahahahahaha, ur w
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:21:04) |
Thanks for the comments! I just wish I had more time to write!
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Re: Yeah Mom! I'm Cleaning My Room!
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by nerdgirl on Sunday, September 06, 2009 (16:31:54) |
haha! this is great. cant wait for my son to reach that age... lol
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Re: Yeah Mom! I'm Cleaning My Room!
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by varivas on Saturday, September 26, 2009 (21:22:24) |
Thanks for the comments. I wish my kids weren't old enough for this yet. It's my youngest that this is about
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Re: Yeah Mom! I'm Cleaning My Room!
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by ken2shoes on Saturday, June 19, 2010 (16:31:34) |
nice, original. I didn't know it was a kid's poem at first, so I was looking for a shocker, like something that indicated one of the parents was gone or something. This could very easily be turned into a moving poem about loss.
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