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Poems - PRISM

PRISM

by mercymercy

I can not see the bottom
of the quiet forest pool
now that we are deep into
Autumn.
It is darker from the damp,
thickly gray clouds
and the heavy covering of the
bright flecks of leaves in their glory --stranded in bunches as
if later-year gardenias.

This is not to say the
clear, wavering heat of
Summer
with its sparkling
blue sky reflection which
revealed even the tiniest rocks
at the bottom of this lovely pond
is forever passed or
longingly remembered.
It is the constant turmoil of
Summer that
brings today the fuller
wonder of
Autumn --
the softer sleep and
heart’s discovery
of the new
slowly intertwining
with the old.

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Re: PRISM (Score: 1 )
by shazza on Saturday, November 07, 2009 (02:10:36)

A pure and simple wow from me x
take care
Shazza

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Saturday, November 07

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by Jayelle on Saturday, November 07, 2009 (09:38:56)

This is breathtakingly beautiful...I must give it my special highest praise word: "Exquisite"! (& a favorite's heart) Just a straight up 10! Joan

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Saturday, November 07

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by WordLover on Saturday, November 07, 2009 (17:34:54)

mercy - the scenes you depict are so vivid! I especially love the way you end it - softly beautiful. So well done.

Sandy (WordLover)

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Saturday, November 07

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by Zbird on Saturday, November 07, 2009 (19:56:53)

this is beautiful!!! great imagery!!!

don't forget to join Melly's sock hop slam! should be great fun! read the comments first as it has a twist Smile

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Saturday, November 07

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by Lionheart on Saturday, November 07, 2009 (21:06:30)

A little overcast often gives a new perspective on things. Personally...I find life seems somewhat more tranquil when I walk with my head in the clouds...ha!

Joking aside MM, I thoroughly enjoyed this one. It reminds me of those dreamy days of summer, caught in the moment somewhere between the present and some far off dream.

Autumn --
the softer sleep and
heart’s discovery
of the new
slowing intertwining
with the old.

Wonderful verses Milady

“ Lionheart
~

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Sunday, November 08

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by mamta on Sunday, November 08, 2009 (01:02:58)

GREAT imagery.

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Sunday, November 08

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by nerdgirl on Sunday, November 08, 2009 (18:25:21)

A wonderful write mercy. Lovely images in my mind that gave my jumpy soul a short vacation.

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Sunday, November 08

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by sarahgrace on Sunday, November 08, 2009 (22:12:20)

i really enjoyed reading this.

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Sunday, November 08

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by dav.smith on Monday, November 09, 2009 (02:29:21)

Mercy, My latest Fav. now. This is true poetry. You are a true poet. May I be endeared with many more like this. Cheers dAVE

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Monday, November 09

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by Ozymandias on Monday, November 09, 2009 (04:57:41)

Beautiful and sensitive verses with their own quiet depth.

I am wondering why you put "slowing" instead of just "slow" in second last line. But perhaps there is a good reason.

I also wonder about whether you really mean in S2 to say something to the effect that This is not to say that.... summer... is... longingly remembered, i.e. implying that summer is forgotten. For me it introduces some confusion.

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Monday, November 09

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by questionajourney on Monday, November 09, 2009 (23:42:37)

wow that's beautiful...i could take that and a nap for the rest of my live and say i lived in peace..awesome..qaj

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Re: PRISM by mercymercy on Tuesday, November 10

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by Ridge on Wednesday, November 18, 2009 (23:26:57)

Wonderful imagery!

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