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Do You See What I See?

by wordsmithwannabe

He stares back at me with plain old boring eyes
And I can barely stand the sight of him
So I tell him that I hate him
That he’s ugly and he’s fat
And stupid and unlovable
That he makes me want to puke
Because he’s a fucking loser
I tell him that I don’t love him
That I never have and never will
And all the while he’s mimicking
My every goddamn word
And it’s pissing me off so
I go silent
Look him in his plain old boring eyes
And wait for his own words
But he has no words of his own to speak
So I scream at him
And suddenly, finally
He’s screaming back and
I don’t know what to do
So I punch him and punch him
And punch him again
Til my knuckles bleed
And his ugly fat stupid unlovable fuck face
Is shattered into a million shards
And now I have to buy a brand new bathroom mirror




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Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
by angeroseblue on Monday, February 08, 2010 (10:25:37)
wow
and when you buy it
you will see the same face
and it is nothing as you describe!

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    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Monday, February 08, 2010 (13:21:56)
    Embarassed Embarassed Very Happy Embarassed Embarassed

    yeah, i know, but you ever just have those days where you just get so down on yourself and can't even stand to look in the mirror?

    thank god those days are few and far between Very Happy otherwise i'd a bad luck rating of infinity x 7...

    C

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      Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
      by angeroseblue on Monday, February 08, 2010 (23:33:31)
      i do a lot more often than people expect!
      but i have to realize that i am me!! Laughing Laughing

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        Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
        by wordsmithwannabe on Tuesday, February 09, 2010 (00:33:35)
        amen, beautiful girl, amen Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy

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          Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
          by angeroseblue on Wednesday, February 10, 2010 (14:32:42)
          Mad
          I AM NOT BEUTIFUL Razz

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            Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
            by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, February 10, 2010 (14:38:43)
            apparently you can't spell either LOL

            the word is BEAUTIFUL

            AND YES YOU ARE!!!!

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              Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
              by angeroseblue on Thursday, February 11, 2010 (18:36:29)
              i am not
              am not
              am not
              am not
              am not
              am not
              am not
              am not Mad Mad Mad Mad Mad

              i am cute Very Happy

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                Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
                by wordsmithwannabe on Thursday, February 11, 2010 (18:54:56)
                i can see we're getting nowhere with this, so i propose a compromise: CUTIFUL (you say cute, i say beautiful, why not combine the two??)

                Very Happy

                PS I WIN!!!!

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                  Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
                  by nerdgirl on Thursday, February 11, 2010 (23:23:55)
                  ** Shes beautifuk!!!!

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                    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
                    by wordsmithwannabe on Friday, February 12, 2010 (00:19:22)
                    that's PERFECT!!!!

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                    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
                    by angeroseblue on Friday, February 12, 2010 (00:19:34)
                    what the hell

                    cut this out !!! Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing

                    i feel like i am being

                    ***gangbanged

                    no ganged up on
                    LOLA !! Embarassed

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Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
by butterflyzrfree on Tuesday, February 09, 2010 (13:48:26)
Love that closing line. Narrator could care less if he killed the person.... great write!

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    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Tuesday, February 09, 2010 (20:05:05)
    thanks Gail Very Happy the closing line was the inspiration for the whole piece, and i'm you got the sense the narrator could care less, i wasn't sure if that came through properly or not Very Happy

    chris

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      Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
      by butterflyzrfree on Tuesday, February 09, 2010 (20:28:27)
      I just re-read it and it sounds like you were talking to yourself in the mirror? Am I right? That makes it even better! sorry I screwed up on this one.... Sad

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        Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
        by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, February 10, 2010 (14:40:58)
        yep you're right, but you were also right about the narrator not caring, he destroys himself in the process, so you didn't screw up!!

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Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
by nerdgirl on Thursday, February 11, 2010 (23:26:17)
I barely look at myself in the mirror since I was pregnant. So I understand this completely.

Its sad.

** Tell him he doesnt need to say those things

What?

*** I bet the mirror blushes when he walks by

Marie......

** Im just saying

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    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
    by angeroseblue on Friday, February 12, 2010 (00:18:33)
    i will pretend i didnt read the first line

    you are freakin BEAUTIFUC Laughing Laughing Laughing

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    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Friday, February 12, 2010 (00:23:57)
    awww you're killin me here, I really don't feel that way anymore, well not as much anyway

    **not true, just this morning you flipped yourself on in the mirror and said "god you're such a filthy whore!!"

    um actually, Seb, that was directed at you...

    **oh. huh. you're kinda mean, you know that?

    yep, now hush up so i can finish

    **hey Marie, wanna see a trick i can do with my tongue?

    God you're such a filthy whore!!

    **aha!! caught ya again!!!

    dammit

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Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
by Leggolas on Saturday, February 13, 2010 (11:58:16)
Initially your poem allured me along a different path, hence I wasn't expecting the self reflecting conclusion that impacted so potently. Great write Chris. Fond Regards. Mark.

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    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Saturday, February 13, 2010 (14:08:01)
    Thank you Mark, I wasn't sure if people would get this one or not, but i had to try!! take care my friend

    chris

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Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
by rondo on Sunday, March 28, 2010 (00:55:30)
somtimes I play bathroom scale frisbee...great write

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    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Sunday, March 28, 2010 (01:02:54)
    Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing
    mines at the bottom of the Columbia somewhere, along with my subscription to Men's Health magazine...

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Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
by Lola on Thursday, September 02, 2010 (15:28:59)
Nice twist at the end to this one. It was great!!! I loved it.

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    Re: Do You See What I See? (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Thursday, September 02, 2010 (18:47:37)
    thank you so much! i'm glad that you enjoyed this Very Happy

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