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She's Gone

by wordsmithwannabe

She’s gone to find herself.
Gone, and left me alone with me,
the man that I thought I never was.

She’d found my body on the sands,
lost and lacking senses
I had forsaken years before.

I discovered them anew,
in her piercing poet’s eyes,
in the perfume of her hair,

the salty taste of her golden skin,
the wild flowers that adorned her
as though they were born there

and had never existed anywhere else.
But it is she who is everywhere but here,
left me staring at a lonely stem,
a child whispering into the ocean breeze

She loves me, she loves me…not

I stare out into the eastern blue,
throw her petals to the wind,
beg and plead and cry out loud
to every god I know

to tell her to come home.
Come back to me, my wild heart,
return to the sun-warmed sands
where we shared our first laugh.

I am waiting for you…





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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by AndreyFisht on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (03:26:50)
Just very beautiful piece...Never heard of the "poetic eyes",great wording.Enjoyed!

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (13:16:51)
    thank you Andrey, I'm happy that you enjoyed this piece Very Happy

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Disfrazada on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (09:25:52)
Very sad poem my friend... yet so beautifully written. Once again, you have done an outstanding job Chris.

Take care.......

DiSfRaZada

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (13:20:10)
    thanks Doc, your insightful comments always boost my confidence and make me strive to be a better writer, I'm grateful

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Jayelle on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (10:05:31)
My favorite lines, being a wildflower lover:

In the perfume of her hair,
The salty taste of her golden skin,
The wild flowers that adorned her
As though they were born there

I also like this for the vivid image it gives my mind:

"But it is she who is everywhere but here,
Left me staring at a lonely stem,
A child whispering into the ocean breeze
She loves me, she loves me…not"

Nice one, Chris! J.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (13:25:58)
    dearest Joan, I'm always flattered when you comment on one of my pieces, you leave the most beautiful words behind for me to blush over. thank you for that

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by cathy.robinson on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (10:53:28)
love this one, precious...i almost tasted her salty skin myself...nice. =)

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (13:27:50)
    hehe thanks cathy. i'm curious tho, is the poem the "precious" or am I??? Laughing Laughing Laughing

    chris

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by cathy.robinson on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (14:59:47)
      both. and that's my final answer. =)

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        Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
        by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (16:02:11)
        Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing
        oh cathy, i am loving you more and more each day!!

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          Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
          by cathy.robinson on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (17:12:38)
          *smiles* good. Wink

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by StarDust on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (12:15:19)
this is so sad Chris.. are you ok??? Sad Sad

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (13:30:23)
    darling StarDust, you are so kind and caring, I am fine Very Happy this is an older piece I stumbled across the other day and decided to dust off and clean up to post Wink i'm touched that you asked about me, you always make me smile Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Keeperofhope on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (15:01:19)
lovely write my friend

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (16:02:56)
    thanks Jess Wink

    chris

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by Keeperofhope on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (16:53:46)
      BTW when you have the time can you please stop by and read some of my new poems trying to get more feed back on them.. lol there are like 4 of them thanks

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        Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
        by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (17:28:04)
        will do, soldier girl Wink

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by thewholesoul on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (15:43:37)
lovely piece mate.

be well
conor

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (16:03:48)
    thank you Conor, nice of you to stop by and read and comment, it is much appreciated

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by rondo on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (16:43:29)
Nice work sweet hypnotic refrains

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (17:31:29)
    thanks man, i'm trying to mesmerize people into thinking this stuff is any good Laughing Laughing Laughing always nice to see your devilish avatar on my pages my friend

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by PinkNeonFlavor on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (16:51:55)
I really like this piece, my friend. Very emotional....

Come back to me, my wild heart,
Return to th e sun-warmed sands
Where we shared our first laugh
I am waiting for you


It's just...beautiful. That is all I can say..I mean as a basic term. I'd go into much more detail for this exquisite piece, but everyone on here including yourself should know all the details within the usage of words...positive words..

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (17:33:00)
    thanks Sam, you know the word "exquisite" is a fave of mine Embarassed

    chris Wink

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Kinky-Minky on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (16:54:52)
This is beautiful! And so very sad. Im tearing up over here.

This is a piece that really tugs my heartstrings.

-hugs-

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (17:36:07)
    awww no crying on my pages now, you'll get me started!! glad you stopped by K-M, now if you'll excuse me I need more tissues Crying or Very sad

    chris

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by Kinky-Minky on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (17:51:33)
      Shocked No no... No crying. -hugs-

      **Right there on pillows...lay your head

      MINKY! Shocked

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Kinky-Minky on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (16:55:37)
Oops pressed submit before I rated... Gotta vote. ^.^

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (17:37:53)
    heehee it aint about the rates darlin, I'm just glad you stopped by and graced my pages with your fabulous self Wink Wink

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by Kinky-Minky on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (17:40:11)
      Now you are making me blush... Embarassed

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Craigd741 on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (19:40:57)
Really, really good write. Really puts across the feelings of longing and sadness well, whilst also reading beautifully. Excellent.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (19:56:46)
    thank you Craig, most kind of you to say so, i'm always glad to hear your thoughts on my work

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by angeroseblue on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (23:41:53)
you know how you read a poem and you cry
then
you read it again to try not to cry but it happens anyway
ok
that is me right now
and i feel like cursing so

aAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH....
you are so good at these emotions Crying or Very sad Crying or Very sad

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 17, 2010 (23:57:07)
    hey hey now, no crying all over my pages, you know I can't take that! besides, this story had a happy ending...so don't you cry no more. i hope that my girl, where ever she may be, will read this and know how much i care about her, know that she awakened things in me i thought were long dead, and maybe, just maybe, one day we can walk those sands together again... Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by wolfinwindow on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (07:30:57)
beautifully done on a sad subject. wordsmith you are. you get 10

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (15:05:40)
    thank you Linda, you are most kind and generous Embarassed

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by WordLover on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (14:24:22)
chris, poignant and sad, but so lovely a read! Especially love the salty taste of her skin and the sun-warmed sand - so vivid, I can feel and taste them both. Beautiful.

Sandy

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (15:06:20)
    awww thank you Miss Sandy, you makin me blush now Embarassed

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Jess147 on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (15:14:11)
Definitely can relate to this. It was beautiful. Thanks for the read.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (15:35:52)
    you're quite welcome Wink and thank you for stopping by to read and comment, it is very much appreciated

    chris

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by MusicMaestro13 on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (16:01:18)
I vote that you scratch the 'wannabe' from your name. Ok? That was stellar, dude. I relate to this one really well, and the wave of nostagia still lingers even after I finished reading it. Melancholy and freakin' fantastic! You, my friend, are no wannabe!!

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (16:12:25)
    wow, what a fantastic compliment!! i'm truly honored and appreciative. thank you for taking the time to read and comment, I'll surely return the favor...and I think I'll leave the 'wannabe' in my name, for now, it keeps me humble and reminds me I still have a lot to learn, but thanks for thinking otherwise Wink

    chris

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by MusicMaestro13 on Thursday, March 18, 2010 (16:14:37)
      Don't we all? And the best way to get there is through humility.

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by shazza on Wednesday, March 31, 2010 (19:53:00)
wow Chris this is beautiful....the sadness was felt deep within my soul
hugs chrissy poo

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, March 31, 2010 (19:58:13)
    hehe you said "poo" Laughing thanks for stoppin by, and thanks for the hugs, even if my name has a turd at the end Laughing Laughing Laughing

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by tinker on Thursday, April 01, 2010 (15:21:38)
In her piercing poet’s eyes... gorgeous words.

There are those whose eyes say it all...no doubt. This is beautiful writing Chris...regret & sorrow somehow infused with hope, as if they could not be separated. Exquisite! Smile

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Thursday, April 01, 2010 (19:02:00)
    well thank you very much! yes, sometimes eyes can say much more than can the mouth...thanks for using the word exquisite, it's a personal fave Wink

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by tinker on Thursday, April 01, 2010 (19:16:34)
      For me as well, I also love "stunning," words are beautiful instruments.

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by butterflyzrfree on Wednesday, June 16, 2010 (09:54:01)
Like! This one could be re-written into a lyric...but also like is as is...

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, June 16, 2010 (13:34:27)
    thanks Gaily! i'm not much of a singer LOL i guess it does have a lyrical quality in parts that could be turned in that direction though...intriguing... Wink

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by zhaul on Tuesday, July 27, 2010 (23:49:08)
It is so hard not to fall into cliche, and you managed this just fine, good read.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Wednesday, July 28, 2010 (11:16:09)
    thanks Z, glad you stopped by, this is one of my personal faves

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by flagirl:) on Thursday, August 05, 2010 (19:43:13)
I thought this was very pretty and I enjoyed the part in her piercing poet's eyes also the salty taste of her skin it made me feel what you felt thanks for sharing take care Smile

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Thursday, August 05, 2010 (22:08:12)
    well i'm very pleased that you enjoyed this Very Happy thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by drippingsilence on Friday, August 20, 2010 (08:55:31)
So beautiful, Love is a rare thing to feel, as well find. Lovely Poem:)

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Friday, August 20, 2010 (12:00:13)
    thank you so very much for your comment. you're absolutely right, love is a rare thing to feel, gotta grip it tight when you find it...

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by oSoLovely1986 on Monday, September 13, 2010 (08:58:31)
wow, brought tears to my eyes... i feel like hugging you and saying sorry! ....lol well done my friend. love it. 10 for you. + for me
<3Angela

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Monday, September 13, 2010 (13:24:19)
    awww well thank you Angela, that is very sweet of you. this was an old piece from a long time ago, all is well...thank you so much for your kind words and for the generous rate Very Happy

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by oSoLovely1986 on Monday, September 13, 2010 (13:26:58)
      well it was o so worth it Wink and all the same. very sad piece Sad lol
      <3Angela

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by artisticvirtuoso on Monday, January 10, 2011 (06:19:37)
Wow, I feel the best pieces are the ones that not only show you the experience from the writer's perspective but you automatically see it from a personal standpoint. I cried reading it because I now what its like. God bless!!

A.V.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Tuesday, January 11, 2011 (13:42:22)
    well thank you so much for this wonderful comment!! it's always nice to hear when someone has connected with a poem on such a deep level. many many thanks A.V.

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by artisticvirtuoso on Tuesday, January 11, 2011 (13:57:25)
      Yes indeed! I feel the same way my friend. You are so welcome!

      ArtisticVirtuoso

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by ArrogantDan on Saturday, January 29, 2011 (11:43:29)
How have I never read this?...

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Saturday, January 29, 2011 (22:13:56)
    me not know Very Happy Embarassed Wink

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      Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
      by ArrogantDan on Tuesday, February 01, 2011 (13:49:32)
      Laughing Wink

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Loki on Monday, April 04, 2011 (01:58:56)
It's never any less amazing every time another persons collected words can relight a memory, well played sir.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Tuesday, April 05, 2011 (16:21:10)
    so true. thank you so much for the wonderful comment, i'm tickled pink Very Happy

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Titiksha on Friday, May 13, 2011 (13:20:52)
awww...dis is really very sweet poem...

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Sunday, June 26, 2011 (13:40:48)
    thank you Titiksha, i'm grateful you took the time to read and comment

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by maybelaterr on Friday, June 17, 2011 (16:43:52)
beautiful beautiful beautiful, & so sad :[

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Sunday, June 26, 2011 (13:41:43)
    sometimes beautiful and sad are the same thing Wink glad you stopped by, i really appreciate the comment

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by akshan on Tuesday, July 26, 2011 (07:54:47)


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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by flowergirl on Saturday, November 19, 2011 (22:43:39)
absoulutely beautiful I love poems with nature

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Sunday, November 20, 2011 (14:52:22)
    thank you Gail, i'm so glad you chose to stop by and read this, it's one of my faves. take care.

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by EGranholm on Wednesday, March 21, 2012 (15:34:09)
i love the words in this and the longing that's depicted. It's beautifully crafted.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Friday, March 23, 2012 (11:54:04)
    thank you Emily. i'm pleased that you liked this and thought it worthy of a comment Very Happy

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by karla on Thursday, November 15, 2012 (22:49:41)
My favorite lines 'in her piercing poets eyes' and 'the salty taste of her golden skin'. Strong beautiful words.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Friday, November 16, 2012 (02:08:39)
    thank you karla. i'm glad you took the time to read and comment, you made my day.

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by MixedEmotions on Sunday, December 02, 2012 (18:45:08)
Truly beautiful.

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Sunday, December 02, 2012 (22:30:17)
    thank you! i'm glad you think so Very Happy

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by Pujakins on Saturday, January 12, 2013 (22:22:56)
A fine poem with sad images that build the emotional content of the poem nicely. Warmly, Tasha

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    Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
    by wordsmithwannabe on Sunday, January 13, 2013 (01:20:34)
    thank you Tasha, that's a lovely comment.

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Re: She's Gone (Score: 1 )
by orangetulips12 on Monday, June 17, 2013 (01:54:59)
Sad, but enjoyed....

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