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lol! yep! you got it my friend. As much as we would like to leave all this chaos behind we need each other and couldn't survive without the help of others. good poem!

Re: Drive (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Wednesday, August 04, 2010 (13:32:00)

Thanks. And you're right..we do need each other, like it or not.


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Aww, awaiting happenstance, overcome by eventualities...
I felt a sense of anxiety as I read your poem. Beware of the unknown or perhaps a case of the blase' blues... Pondering, Mary Ann

Re: Drive (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (15:46:32)

Hey Maryann..maybe we've all felt this way? I look around at the world sometimes and want to just let it be its own dysfunctional self without affecting me..but then I remember..thanks for checking in..always appreciated. -H


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Wonderful, Hugh. For better or worse, we're all interconnected as people. We need one another whether we want to need other people or not. One thing life has taught me -- there are plenty of wonderful people in the world just as there are plenty of not-so-wonderful people in the world. I just really hope that if I ever *NEED* someone -- it turns out I run into the right people.

As far as the driving... sometimes I do this. I just jump into the car, throw on some old "The Cure" and drive on and on... it's a type of remedy for the ailments of life. Even if you find yourself cursing at the gas prices later onward.

j.p.

Re: Drive (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (15:48:07)

Hey JP..music always makes it better! I used to listen to "Head On The Door" in my college days. Good times. And I know there are still some good people left, as evidenced by your reply. Thanks.


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i like the relatability coupled with poignancy in this poem, H. the use of conjunctions as the first line for the middle stanzas lends a sort of complex simplicity to the piece that keeps the reader interested. and the fact that the narrator loops back around to the beginning...very indicative of life itself. a great read, as usual.

Re: Drive (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (15:49:15)

Chris, thanks for the insight. I was going for a circular kind of feel. Glad you picked it up. All the best..-H


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No matter how much I end up thinking that I don't need people, I always end up realizing the naivete of that thought. You have portrayed this idea beautifully, here.

Re: Drive (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Monday, August 16, 2010 (11:58:25)

Thanks Tom..you stated perfectly the idea behind this poem. All the best..-H


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I relate to this poem, (sparcely but nicely executed) which is why I'm commenting, but the following caveats apply:

1. The protagonist is defined by and linked into a Borg-like collective of interdependent and correlated service level agreements which underpin the fabric of his cotidian existence. Therefore the poem is an accurate reflection of that particular reality. But: a homeless person, or Ed Stafford, who just came back from 859 days of trekking the lenghtof the Amazon, wouldn't be stuck in the dull Utopia at all: so some people can break free, (or society breaks the m free) ergo
2. The protagonist doesn't have what it takes (chutzpah, adventurers' spirit, etc) to break free from the status quo and venture into the great wide unknown. which is my problem, which is why I relate to this poem: so many different routes I could have taken....

nice on fogg, reminds me how convenience makes us comfortably numb. plumbers do our plumbing an journalists read us our news. if you're just another professional the trade off is fair and it's paid in cash, but how boring is it doing the same old job day in day out and never having to unclog your own toilet. it's all these little things you have to learn to do yourself that keep life from being mundane. i don't think we'd miss it though, that's if you want a piece of the action for real.

i loved how meak the character ends up being by the end, though he starts off seeming so ressourceful. kudos