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Poems - Soldier Boy

Soldier Boy

by wolfinwindow

He lay in the field with his arm blown off.
He calls for his mother and cries.
He hears other soldiers moans and screams
and wonders at all of the whys.

Help's on the way, that's what they say.
He's bleeding to death all the while.
Red blood's on the pocket where the picture
he carries of a beautiful girl and her smile.

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Re: Soldier Boy (Score: 1 )
by PinkNeonFlavor on Wednesday, September 29, 2010 (22:32:03)

Again nicely done. And very very cathartic...

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Re: Soldier Boy (Score: 1 )
by Dreaming-Demon on Wednesday, September 29, 2010 (22:36:51)

wow thats sad and very blunt
(He lay in the field with his arm blown off)....excellent write

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Re: Soldier Boy (Score: 1 )
by variable58 on Wednesday, September 29, 2010 (22:54:05)

yes, this is what war is all about. Sad and hurtful. good job. sad poem.

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Re: Soldier Boy (Score: 1 )
by Zbird on Thursday, September 30, 2010 (08:30:59)

powerful little poem! very poignant!

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Re: Soldier Boy (Score: 1 )
by Ozymandias on Friday, October 01, 2010 (05:48:54)

Another fine write, simple and direct. If I may make a little suggestion: the last 2 lines have wrong syntax at present, and read a bit awkwardly - perhaps you inadvertently left out a verb like "is" or "lies" at the end of L7. If you add this, you could then get a more regular rhythm to L8 by omitting "he carries" or "beautiful". Just a suggestion.

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