sofia_o
  Junior Member

Hi, I liked the first part a lot (till "jam"), as well as the idea. Then it starts to lose its rhythm and in a couple of instances the expression is more prosaic than it should. Also there is no culmination to the ending, it's losing its purpose.
However I believe the first part is really strong, the rythm is strong and almost recreates the rythm of the wheels of the train and the music that was played. I believe it needs some more work, but beautiful theme, great rythm! more »

Very poor translation I'm afraid.