My First Heartache

My First Heartache 1997 (Dilasa)

Free verse

No one seems to remember
That I've fallen for you
For a span of time
I know I can't let you go

Hiding my dark side
You were popping up my mind
I know you're the one
I could end up

You're my first in everything
My heart is beating so fast
I don't know how to let this go
That's why I keep it

The pain of watching you
Being happy with someone
If only I could tell you
But I know it's too late

About this poem

This poem is all about this person that I love but he said to me "I treated you the same as the others". So I did things that I couldn't imagine I could so I stop because I'm becoming the worst of myself that I shouldn't be.

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Written on November 15, 2023

Submitted by jenniferbregatcho on March 31, 2024

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Scheme	XAXB XXCX XXBX ACAX
Closest metre	Iambic trimeter
Characters	407
Words	103
Stanzas	4
Stanza Lengths	4, 4, 4, 4

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My First Heartache

This poet is about the man I once loved but know I can finally let go of him, because I know he is not for me more…

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Feedback: This poem beautifully captures the raw emotions of experiencing your first heartache. The vulnerability and longing shine through in every line, drawing the reader in and making them feel your pain.

Improvement suggestions:
1. Consider adding more imagery or vivid descriptions to enhance the emotions in the poem. This can make the reader feel even more connected to the speaker's experience.
2. Work on varying the rhythm and structure of the poem to create more impact and keep the reader engaged. Experiment with line breaks, punctuation, and stanza lengths to add more dynamics to the piece.

Overall, you have a great start with this poem. Keep writing and revising to bring out the full potential of your emotions and experiences. Great job! more »
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