Analysis of Wishing Wins

Lawrence S. Pertillar 1947 (Connecticut)



Winning is not a given.
Nor is a love of discipline.
To have it begin.
As a life changing event.
Kept to remain without an end.

Sitting to wish for wins to receive,
Takes the making of mistakes.
Unafraid to face them and admit,
An appetite to crave...
Has its disappointments.
And an array of obstacles.
Coming as if to test one's determination.

Determination?
Is never satisfied by mediocrity.
Since,
Once that taste of doing better arrives...
Stays to keep one sleepless.
Up at nights.
Attempting to find a better way to erase,
That chase to accomplish the impossible.

And even at one's best,
From others heard to have it said.
The one wishing wins,
Can not stop.
Regardless.
How exhausted the mind trys to convince,
One driven to win.
When the only competitor there is,
Happens to be...
The very one who refuses to accept,
Their own criticism!

'You will never be perfect.
Believe and accept,
The success of your accomplishments.
To who and what,
Are you wanting to prove?'

'That I can!'

'That you can?
That you can do what?
Out do and be better than yourself?'

'I can and I will.
Against the odds!'

'Come here.
Closer.
I want to whisper this to you.
Have you lost your mind?'

'That...
I have yet determined.
To prove or decide.'

'There you go.
Being opinionated.
Stand in line.'

'Stand in line?
Stand in line behind who?'

'Me!
How obvious should I make this?
And people think what I do to win,
Is easy.'

'I'm going to leave you alone.'


Scheme aabxx xxxxcxa adexfxxx xxxxfebxdgx xgchx i ihx xx xxjx xxx xxK Kj dxbd x
Poetic Form
Metre 1011010 11011100 11101 1011001 11010111 101111101 1010101 01111001 11011 110010 01011100 10111110010 0010 1101010100 1 1111101001 111110 111 010110101101 11101000100 010111 11011111 01101 111 010 1010011101 11011 1010010011 1011 01011010101 11100 1110101 01001 001110100 1101 111011 111 111 11111 110110101 11011 0101 11 10 11110111 11111 1 111010 1111 111 100100 101 101 101011 1 11001111 010111111 110 11011101
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,414
Words 275
Sentences 49
Stanzas 14
Stanza Lengths 5, 7, 8, 11, 5, 1, 3, 2, 4, 3, 3, 2, 4, 1
Lines Amount 59
Letters per line (avg) 18
Words per line (avg) 4
Letters per stanza (avg) 78
Words per stanza (avg) 19
Font size:
 

Submitted by lpahtillah on August 03, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

1:20 min read
5

Discuss this Lawrence S. Pertillar poem analysis with the community:

0 Comments

    Citation

    Use the citation below to add this poem analysis to your bibliography:

    Style:MLAChicagoAPA

    "Wishing Wins" Poetry.com. STANDS4 LLC, 2024. Web. 23 May 2024. <https://www.poetry.com/poem-analysis/106373/wishing-wins>.

    Become a member!

    Join our community of poets and poetry lovers to share your work and offer feedback and encouragement to writers all over the world!

    May 2024

    Poetry Contest

    Join our monthly contest for an opportunity to win cash prizes and attain global acclaim for your talent.
    8
    days
    19
    hours
    29
    minutes

    Special Program

    Earn Rewards!

    Unlock exciting rewards such as a free mug and free contest pass by commenting on fellow members' poems today!

    Browse Poetry.com

    Quiz

    Are you a poetry master?

    »
    Which of the following was the last to evolve?
    A Epic poetry
    B Dithyramb
    C Invective
    D Tragedy