Analysis of Saving Consciousness



One's determination to save,
And protect their kept consciousness...
These turned upside down days.
Will take more than just luck to wish it.
Since so much thrown to duck,
In the hope to miss it all?
Seems too sacrificial.

Although,
Better it would be...
Is to pretend to have lost one's mind.
Needing no disguise to notice...
One more cracked up joining the circus.
And...
Play along with the quacks.
Followed by those already whacked out.

To then await and pray for tolerance.
Until the numbskulls finally break away...
From thick shells to witness,
Them being reborn from mentalities...
Sickened!
With innocent eyes and smiles appearing,
To gaze lovingly upon you to hear...

'Are you my Mommy or Daddy or both?'

And...
Without committing to respond.
Just leave and move on to know,
How blessed you have been to witness...
God working,
In the most mysterious of ways!


Scheme xabxxxx cxxaaDxx xxaadex x Dxcaeb
Poetic Form
Metre 1001011 00111100 111111 111111111 111111 0011111 11010 1 10111 110111111 10101110 111110010 0 101101 101101011 1101011100 0101100101 111110 1101111 10 1100101010 1110001111 1111011011 0 01010101 1101111 11111110 110 001010011
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 841
Words 149
Sentences 22
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 7, 8, 7, 1, 6
Lines Amount 29
Letters per line (avg) 23
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 134
Words per stanza (avg) 30
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Submitted by lpahtillah on September 06, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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