Analysis of Ancient Battle



I am endlessly groping among these ancient ruins,
Trying to dodge all these hedges and thorny vines strewn.
I am searching for an ancient artifact, only aided by the moon.
The night has now turned into a pensive day,
Yet amid this solemn lonely gloom, my day is still a day away.

I am seeking under the sun, amid my pain,
Trying to not come undone, for this is my refrain,
Crying out to my Father, under the pouring rain.
There is no end for me, to my mighty ceaseless praying.
Why is this cruel fight, one so hard to make right?

I'm in this saying, “Father, end this nightmare,
So I can finally start living, my primeval day.
No more night demons, so I can be forgiven today!”
I close my eyes and crumble, dropping to my demise,
Calling it quits, I’m sure I’ve lost the sacred prize.

But my Mentor is wise, calling me up from the skies,
Exhorting me He says, “It’s enough, I’ll compromise.
I'll save you, as you willingly, faithfully, and humbly, sacrifice your life.
Give it to me as a sign, and I will give you Mine.
You’ve given your very best to pass this test, now I’ll bless you through all the rest.”

So with sword and shield in hand,
I yield to my Master’s command.
Together we face this eminent battle land,
As He clears the way through sordid foliage, and slipping sand.
We now proceed straight forward, to a higher place.

Here now is where I finally behold His face!
I feel His love and light, and know His full amazing grace!
Now I know what it means, to truly let go.
We cohesively march on through the murky marsh,
Searching for this sacred ancient place of grace.

This artifact is one of ancient design, a pearl of most exquisite white.
A symbol of holy love, Spirit and light,
Hidden deep down, well under ground.
An ancient treasure of sacred worth,
Serving as a sacred token portal, to return home from earth.

Master, only with Thee will I go, for only Thy true great name saves.
I’ll catch on and take hold of Thy soul, never to let go!
On our Father’s Majesty, His right hand, Thou takes all godly control, completing Thy perfect role.
With newness of ways, we live in the promised and saving days.
Now is the time of the great redeeming, the fulfilling of the ancient battle ablaze!


Scheme XAABB CCCXD XBBEE EEXXX FFFFG GGHXG DDXII XHXJJ
Poetic Form
Metre 11100100111010 1011111001011 11101110101010101 01111010101 10111010111110101 111010010111 1011101111101 1011110100101 11111111101010 111101111111 1011010111 11110011010101 11110111101001 1111010101101 101111110101 111111011101 010111101110 111111001000101011 1111101011111 1101101111111111101 1110101 11111001 010111100101 11101110100101 110111010101 111111000111 11110101110101 11111111011 101001110101 10111010111 110111100101111001 01011011001 10111101 110101101 1010101010101111 10101111111011111 11101111110111 1101010011111110010101011 110111100100101 1101101010001010101001
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 2,237
Words 457
Sentences 28
Stanzas 8
Stanza Lengths 5, 5, 5, 5, 5, 5, 5, 5
Lines Amount 40
Letters per line (avg) 43
Words per line (avg) 10
Letters per stanza (avg) 213
Words per stanza (avg) 51

About this poem

This poem is about overcoming addiction, plain and simple. The imagery and storyline make it catchy, and the message redemptive.

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Written on May 29, 2020

Submitted by ShaneB-Z on January 13, 2022

Modified by ShaneB-Z on July 06, 2023

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Shane Brown

I am a family man of God first and foremost. I love my wife, two sons and daughter very much. After this, my life pretty much revolves around technology, music, writing, poetry, drums, dancing, singing, and building others up. I love helping to build bridges between people, and individually and collectively uplifting mankind. I love learning, and pro-actively gaining experience from what I've learned, then sharing my joy with others. My life is dedicated to loving and serving my Lord, through helping and blessing others. more…

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