Analysis of Going Down Breathless

Lawrence S. Pertillar 1947 (Connecticut)



Hypnotized.
Unconsciously blinded.
And with poisoned minds,
Taken.
To undermine no longer to find,
The use of common sense.
Stripped away and made convinced,
Themselves connected...
To one who tricks and selected them to pick,
As disciples of a hiddened wickedness.

Going down.
Far and below a darkened underground.
Heated to perform a surfaced devastation.
Supported and allowed to escalate.
By one who is the master,
Of fraud, deception and creating fools.
And baited they become willing martyrs.
Sacrificing themselves to destroy,
Along with their reputation...
Credibility.
And lives of others.
To remain and stay loyal to lies told.

Going down they all go.
Far and below,
Beyond the underground.
Exchanging their souls.
As they follow to allow,
Holes drilled into their hearts.
Hypnotized, blinded and unconscious of it,
A pledging of a loyalty like this...
Can leave them permanently breathless.
Regardless,
Of confessions to make...
After awakening to claim mistakes made.
In the hope to return to lives lived,
Sacrificed and burned to allow it done!

Especially when they knew it known,
Someone in need...
To have their loyalty pledged and shown.
Began from a darkened place.
With a wish to strip their consciousness,
Away from them to replace with that...
Of a childish deluded mind.
Having a need to destroy humanity.

Could money, status and power to have it.
Be the cause and reason,
People will allow their minds and souls...
Become sold even though they know,
There is a Hell below!
Not to be judged but convict.
 


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Poetic Form Tetractys  (26%)
Etheree  (26%)
Metre 10 10010 01101 10 11011011 011101 1010101 01010 11110010111 1010101100 101 100101010 10101010010 010001110 1111010 1101000101 0101011010 10001101 0111010 0100 01110 1010110111 101111 1001 01010 01011 1110101 110111 101001011 0101010011 111100010 010 101011 10010011011 001101111 100110111 01011111 101 111100101 0110101 101111100 01111111 10100101 10011010100 11010010111 101010 101011101 01110111 110101 1111110
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,530
Words 304
Sentences 36
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 10, 12, 14, 8, 6
Lines Amount 50
Letters per line (avg) 24
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 242
Words per stanza (avg) 50
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Written on July 12, 2022

Submitted by lpahtillah on July 12, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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