Analysis of Noticeable Change



If everyone actually did,
What had been expected of them done to do.
The need to use assumptions...
Allegations and rumors to add spice to gossip,
Will leave many mentally healthier.
With more time to spend,
Minding their own business.
Done to do with less time to claim,
Of not having enough to clean up...
The mess spreading from their backyards,
Throughout entire neighborhoods...
Where they live but seldom are seen,
Doing anything else...
Other than sitting on the front porch.
Talking as loud as they possible can.
About themselves.
And who drives up and down the street.
Instead of looking for a job to contribute,
To the uplifting of the community.
With that to make noticeable change!
If...
They actually did,
Something done to contribute...
A doing to improve the community.
Instead of talking about others.
And what they do not to know them at all.

'Good morning, neighbor?'

'Hold on, just a second.
What did you say?'

'Good morning.
Is it possible you could lower your voice?
My family and I can not hear ourselves,
Praying over Sunday dinner.
Would you like to join us?'

'Oh no.
I was just about to hang up the phone.
And start doing chores inside the house.'

'Will your mouth be left opened or closed?'

'EXCUSE ME?
WILL MY MOUTH BE WHAT!?'

'OH...I am so sorry.
I apologize.
I meant to say door.
Will your door be opened or closed?
I can bring you a plate over in ten minutes.
To enjoy and eat as slow as possible.
The peach cobbler is my favorite.'

'Sounds good.
I'll leave my door open.'

'Please.
But...
If you don't mind,
I'd rather knock.
It will give me the opportunity,
To see something I have not seen in awhile!'


Scheme AXXBCXDXBXXXXXXEXFGXXAFGXX C XX XXECD XXX H GI GXXHXXX XX XIXXGX
Poetic Form Tetractys  (38%)
Metre 1101001 11101011111 0111010 010010111110 1110100100 11111 101110 11111111 111001111 0110111 0101010 11111011 10101 101101011 1011111001 0101 01110101 011101011010 1010100100 111110001 1 11001 1011010 01010100100 011100110 0111111111 11010 111010 1111 110 11100111011 110001111001 1010110 111111 11 1110111101 011010101 111111011 011 11111 11110 1010 11111 11111011 111101100110 10101111100 011011100 11 111110 1 1 1111 1101 111100100 11101111001
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,643
Words 358
Sentences 46
Stanzas 10
Stanza Lengths 26, 1, 2, 5, 3, 1, 2, 7, 2, 6
Lines Amount 55
Letters per line (avg) 23
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 125
Words per stanza (avg) 29
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Written on October 22, 2023

Submitted by lpahtillah on October 22, 2023

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