Analysis of Feeling To Do Better



Feeling I can do better,
Than what was my best.
With less effort endeavored.
As if felt I could,
Produce to achieve more.
Without sleep or rest to get.
Like an electric switch,
To turn off and back on.
Whenever I wished to do it.
Only to be awakened,
By the sound of snoring done.
Then to sit up in bed,
Looking for someone not there but me.
Feeling I can do better to get rest.
Than what I thought I had been doing,
When I closed my eyes.
To wonder why,
What makes thunder roar...
Sometimes before lightning strikes.
And at other times when lightning strikes,
No thunder is heard at all.

'Do you ever wonder about that?'

'Nooo...
I do not.
But what I do wonder about,
Is why you snore so loud.
To wake me up before you wake yourself up.
Then look at me staring at you.
While you ask me if I heard someone snoring.'

'I can't sleep peacefully.
You have any suggestions?'

'Well...
Maybe drinking a cup of hot tea.
With honey and lemon with some Brandy.
Could assist in helping you get more sleep.'

'I don't drink tea.'

'How about a glass of wine?'

'What kind do you like?
What is your preference?'

'Then drink a bottle of beer.
And when you begin to feel sleepy,
Go to bed.'

'At what time?'

'I have a better idea.
Why don't I drug the beer.
Without you knowing what time it is.
And I'll make lightning and thunder sounds.
Just to make sure,
You will never hear anyone snoring again.
For the rest of your life.'

'Or...
Smothering you.
Accidently, of course.'

'Is it that bad?'

'Look at these bags under my eyes.
They appear as if I've packed,
To take a trip somewhere.'

'Were you?
Is that why I find you awake.
Planning to do something behind my back?'

'IM NOT GETTING ANY SLEEP.
IM NOT GETTING ANY SLEEP AT ALL!'

'Geessshhh.
I was just joking.
Maybe we should take a vacation.
And spend our time relaxing.'

'How about we slept in separate rooms.
And had sex whenever that was a necessity!'


Scheme XAXXBXXCXXDEFAGHXBIIJ X CXXXXKG FX XFFL F X XX MFE X XMXXXXX BKX X HXX KXX LJ HGDG XF
Poetic Form
Metre 1011110 11111 1110010 11111 011011 0111111 110101 111011 01011111 1011010 1011101 111101 10111111 1011110111 111111110 11111 1101 11101 0101101 011011101 1101111 111010011 1 111 11111001 111111 11110111011 11111011 1111111110 111100 1110010 1 101001111 1100101110 1010101111 1111 1010111 11111 111100 1101011 011011110 111 111 11010010 111101 011101111 011100101 1111 11101101001 101111 1 1001 100011 1111 11111011 1011111 11011 01 11111101 1011100111 1110101 111010111 1 11110 101110010 01101010 101110101 0110101100100
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,937
Words 453
Sentences 60
Stanzas 18
Stanza Lengths 21, 1, 7, 2, 4, 1, 1, 2, 3, 1, 7, 3, 1, 3, 3, 2, 4, 2
Lines Amount 68
Letters per line (avg) 21
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 79
Words per stanza (avg) 20
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Written on December 11, 2023

Submitted by lpahtillah on December 11, 2023

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