Analysis of When your dream comes true

Richard J Edwards 1960 (Ft Belvoir)



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When your dream comes true

Sinatra is playing at the bar. The conversation is rolling on just low enough to still hear the music. I'm sitting in the corner so I can see everyone.  Then she walks into the frame of site and takes a table near the side walk. She's a beauty that's out of my league but that does not matter. In a moments dream I can see us together hand in hand with hope in our eyes of a future together. I can't stop staring at her and she seems to not be about any silliness. I work up to the nerve to ask her out and I'm terrified that she won't like my delivery.  I can't screw around I need to keep it light hearted but I can't let her say no. I need to make sure she knows it's all about her and I apply no pressure.  OMG she's beautiful and I can tell through her mannerisms that she has a good heart. I look away for a moment and she's gone. I come out of my skin cause I feel I've lost her forever. What am I gonna do my life is over. Then I wake up and it was all a dream upto the point it was a nightmare cause I lost her or did I. I look next to me and there she is sitting next to me and I smile as I watch her take a nap.


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Characters 1,163
Words 248
Sentences 16
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 2, 1
Lines Amount 3
Letters per line (avg) 295
Words per line (avg) 83
Letters per stanza (avg) 443
Words per stanza (avg) 125
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Written on December 12, 2023

Submitted by rjenavy on December 12, 2023

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Richard J Edwards

Retired Navy. Live in Montana. And Love God. In 2004 I wrote and had published by poetry. Com The Truth Of Heart and Soul put in their book "Involving the Muse". This is not my best work. I have 40yrs of writings I know R publish worthy I'm just looking for some to help that knows how to do that. I'm a common man and I believe my writings R easily relatable. more…

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