Analysis of Your Place Or Mine



If wishing it to dream,
For someone special hoping to meet.
Having all the ingredients,
That the heart, mind, ears and eyes...
Will find no one else,
Unable to compete.
Why continue to play a game that delays,
Known too difficult to beat.
When two people have shown,
Temperatures rising between them both.
Not to run and stay.
With no attempt to escape from flames.
Heating up to nearly,
Burn their clothes off.

As both pretend what is felt for them,
Is hidden and discreet.
And not expose to show publicly.
With both noses wide open.
Frantically breathing.
As if in need for more oxygen.
And that ain't all attempted,
Kept to keep secretly discreet.
Rising from a smoldering heat.
In the midst of falling snow.
Leaving two alone standing.
Melting ice that begins to thaw,
Frozen to freeze on an urban city street.

'Perhaps we should go for coffee to get.
Or maybe hot chocolate.
Or tea honey sweet?'

'In this falling snow where would we go?'

'Your place or mine?'

'Then to do what?'

'Open up the windows!'


Scheme XAXXXAXAXXXXBX XABCDCXAAEDXA XFA E X F X
Poetic Form
Metre 110111 11101011 10100100 1011101 11111 010101 10101101101 1110011 111011 100100111 11101 110110111 101110 1111 110111111 110001 010111100 1110110 100010 110111100 0111010 11110001 10101001 0011101 1010110 10110111 10111110101 0111111011 110110 11101 011011111 1111 1111 101010
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,013
Words 220
Sentences 26
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 14, 13, 3, 1, 1, 1, 1
Lines Amount 34
Letters per line (avg) 23
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 111
Words per stanza (avg) 26
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Written on April 22, 2024

Submitted by lpahtillah on April 22, 2024

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