Abbykesington
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My mind went on the journey alongside the writer. Clearing away "cobwebs" to make the path clearer. Nice work. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing...

Wow! What a dance! Please keep writing. I enjoy your poems.

You said the "morning arrives, and the horses in their stall await for day break, but it never comes," that bit need a little more explanation because how can the morning arrive and the day never breaks? So if you can work on that bit, it could read more complete. Thank you. more »

thank you for liking the poem. It does bring to perspective the dynamics of a relationship between someone who is a thrill seekers and someone who is constantly fighting anxieties!!

I have a poem titled the journey in my collection of poems. It's sold on amazon. The book is title Finish Line. May you can read more of my works and also be inspired.

Never delete yours. It's your journey and you have described it for the world to read and enjoy...

Such a poignant picture of death you have painted through your words. I could almost hear the call of the sea as the tide rises.... and feel the pain of the horses when day break never came.
Thanks for sharing. Keep writing... more »

You keep inviting my mind back to your village square. This time to watch the wrestlers pounce on a willing opponent". A very good read on old values lost in this present age of modernity. Thanks for sharing... more »

The world trains us to seek success as achievements. Now, I understand the joy that comes with that, but greater joy is helping others achieve their purpose.

you are very much welcome. You will need very colorful regalia, I must warn...

I appreciate your kindness. I'm also learning and trying to be better at my writing...
This poem had to be written! The world can't keep going on like everything is ok...

You have painted such a beautiful picture of serenity. I could almost hear the "rustle of trees "and see the cows grazing in "lush green feilds"....

I love the personification of success. How helping others was the ultimate prize! Thanks for sharing

I was transported to your village. And could see the innocence of untainted "waist dance" under the "full moon." The prayers in the name of "strange ancestors" and being led my "yellow ants" paints a poignant picture! Thanks for sharing... more »

Good that you acknowledge your challenges and depicts them as "shadows" & "darkness". Once there's light, the shadow will evaporate. May the light continue to guide your path...